Communications 1999

Assignment #9 – Writing clear sentences

Assigned: Friday, April 23, 1999

Prepare the following on separate sheets of paper. Head each paper using the format provided by Gloria. Proofread your work for clarity, legibility, punctuation, capitalization, spelling, conciseness and complete sentences.

Part 1 – due Monday, April 26, 1999

    1. Choose one of the following sentences with which to work.
  1. Arabs wear turbines on their heads.
  2. We had a longer holiday than usual this year because the school was closed for altercations.
  3. The difference between a king and a president is that a king is the son of his father, but a president isn’t.
    1. As it is written, what does your choice mean?
    2. What writing error did the author make in the sentence you chose?
    3. Rewrite the sentence so that it clearly states what its author most likely intended.

I’ll correct part 1 and return it to you on Tuesday, April 27, 1999. Do not proceed to part 2 until you have carefully reviewed what you did right and wrong in part 1.

Part 2 – due Thursday, April 29, 1999

    1. Choose one of the following sentences with which to work.
  1. The pedestrian had no idea which direction to run, so I ran over him.
  2. I had been driving for about 40 years, when I fell asleep at the wheel and had an accident.
  3. My car sustained no damage whatsoever, and the other car somewhat less.
    1. As it is written, what does your choice mean?
    2. What writing error did the author make in the sentence you chose?
    3. Rewrite the sentence so that it clearly states what its author most likely intended.

Example discussed in class on Friday, April 23:

    1. When I saw I could not avoid a collision, I stepped on the gas and crashed into the other car.
    2. It means that, by stepping on the gas, the author intentionally made the accident worse than it otherwise would have been.
    3. The author left unstated a key step in his/her thought process.
    4. In a last ditch effort to avoid a collision, I stepped on the gas to try to get around the other car before it hit me.

 

Richard Lederer collected the sentences with which I’ve asked you to work. He published them in his book Anguished English (Wyrick and Co., 1987).